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 Junebug
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 Junebug
  Posted 14/08/2007 01:29:21 AM
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My newest edition:

I sleep. some long dreamless thought.
quicksands of slumber that are made up of greys and thirty thousand spectrums of black.
Me.stetched into exhaustion from pouring the best serums of my heart into her smile. Now stetched and reconfigured into a thin line.Lighthouse dim after a storm and flickered into shades i cannot diagnose or assume into for the sake of consultation or remedy.
i am the odometer to her heartbeat's track record tonight.wearing the blue socks that she has put me into.
A new color idolizing strangulation of the parts that kept you faithful.
i am valuable and cloudy,stirred up with the aftertastes of her own conscience's glory.
How can i sign to you?
that i do in fact
love.you.
in this lonely fear you're wading in without me.
Morse code transparencies shining underneath your shirt.
All for him.
Make me your compass and i will rule out the shadows that threaten to disown you from the pleasure you bring.
One can get lost for the sheer pleasure of the company.
you will forever be my cupcake,my princess, my piglet,
and my friend.

 Midnite
 Posts : 120
 give me a place to stand and I
shall move the earth
 Midnite
  Posted 14/08/2007 02:26:31 PM
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you're a good writer.. ever consider publishing?

 Junebug
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 Junebug
  Posted 14/08/2007 09:59:25 PM
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I want to write a couple childrens books when i gain some speed or some free time...which ever comes first.But my poetry is too complicated to ever be related to  by stangers i feel. It's simply an expression of thought and i don't worry about making it ryme or giving it structure. That's catchy to the public nowadays. Something that has a rhyme structure to it. It's better than rapsongs butnowadays anything is better then rap lyrics.
I like the simplicity that comes along with writing for children. They are real and there is no need for catch phrases or suger coated meaning.At the end of the day they want to know that their mommy loves them and i'm good at that.
mm.But thank you for the compliment none the less.

 Midnite
 Posts : 120
 give me a place to stand and I
shall move the earth
 Midnite
  Posted 14/08/2007 10:06:35 PM
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it's no problem for the compliment.. it's truly what I think of your stuff.. and I've read some really good poetry that didn't rhyme at all.. in college I was in several english classes (I LOVE english and want to be a writer) and all the poetry I read actually didn't rhyme at all.. hence the reason I think it would be a GREAT idea for you to publish something of yours.. it's a really great read and I think others would enjoy it

 Junebug
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 Junebug
  Posted 14/08/2007 10:17:30 PM
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Thank you. i will take that into consideration. I have a notebook full of poetry.But sometimes, when i go back and read on something i wrote it appears tp have lost it's value because all the feelings that went into writing it are no longer as prevelant or important as i once thought they were.
So it's easy to dogg some of my stuff.
Because the heart has dropped out of the bottom of my words. Brian and i have talked about publishing mine,his,our stuff before and it's always been pushed into a someday so i'm not anxious to begin some recognition trip any time soon.I'm sedated with giving copies to the people that the poem was inspired from.
My mom keeps talking to me about going to school and majoring in journalism.She says i have the heart to help people,the drive to make a difference,the ability to write better than anyone she's ever met and the appearance to make people want to believe me when i smile.
It adds up. Even if she is my mommy and she has to say good things about me.
*smile*

*sigh*i am still in the making.As we all are.
thank you for the support.

 Waffle Bob
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 Waffle Bob
  Posted 14/08/2007 10:37:34 PM
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I take my somedays seriously. I will publish you.

~ t c e f r e p m i ~
 Midnite
 Posts : 120
 give me a place to stand and I
shall move the earth
 Midnite
  Posted 14/08/2007 10:45:11 PM
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hmmm.. don't know what to say to that.. could go either way...

calm down?


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